There was this little girl I met...
she had eyes so little, as if they were two little stars, jolly, and they would actually twinkle!
nose was tiny and flat, i would look at her and wonder how she breathes, but she manages to survive!
the tiny, soft head had strands of hair I could count but they were long! Eyebrows so faint!
Her lips were pretty and promised sweetness upon being kissed. she would sleep most of the time with her little fists, straight, fingers folded! An ivory neck, pretty as ever!
So divine was her beauty that she looked enchanting even when she lay dead! yeah she died, her body into pieces.... she left for other world, where things were supposed to be more beautiful, more peaceful, where love spoke!
She was diagnosed of PARENTOSIS!!
she had eyes so little, as if they were two little stars, jolly, and they would actually twinkle!
nose was tiny and flat, i would look at her and wonder how she breathes, but she manages to survive!
the tiny, soft head had strands of hair I could count but they were long! Eyebrows so faint!
Her lips were pretty and promised sweetness upon being kissed. she would sleep most of the time with her little fists, straight, fingers folded! An ivory neck, pretty as ever!
So divine was her beauty that she looked enchanting even when she lay dead! yeah she died, her body into pieces.... she left for other world, where things were supposed to be more beautiful, more peaceful, where love spoke!
She was diagnosed of PARENTOSIS!!
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